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C onclusions Grade 5 Copyright 2014 by Write Score LLC We are going to work on writing the conclusion or ending of a piece of writing Todays Lesson When working on our conclusions we want to ID: 406206

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Slide1

Strengthening Conclusions

Grade 5

Copyright © 2014 by Write Score LLCSlide2
We are going to work on writing the conclusion

or ending of a piece of writing.Today’s Lesson Slide3
When working on our conclusions, we want to

:provide a concluding statement or section related to the opinion, information, or explanation presented.provide a conclusion that follows from the narrated experiences or events.leave the reader feeling satisfied. Conclusions or E

ndings

To improve a conclusion or ending, we want to:

use effective techniques and descriptive details.Slide4

Getting StartedOne way to improve the conclusion or ending in an opinion essay, informational essay, or narrative story is by revealing a thought and feeling.

To show you what I mean, we are going to read an explanatory essay together.Notice details about the overall topic in order to write an ending that reveals a thought and feeling related to it.

Feelings

ThoughtSlide5

The Dare It was a normal hot and sticky summer day. I was about eight years old and living with my mom and dad in the suburbs north of New York City. The blacktop that coated the surface of our street was melting under the strain of the sun's piercing rays. It oozed thick, black tar and caused the soles of my brand new tennis shoes to stick to the ground and squeak a bit with each step I took. It was that kind of day. Hot. Sticky. A bit squeaky. So maybe that is why I had agreed to participate in something very dangerous and risky. My best friend, Cathy, dared me to play a game with her. It involved riding our bikes as fast as we could toward one another. The idea was to see who would chicken out and turn away before crashing into the other person. It wasn’t a very smart thing to do. Slide6
When the time came to meet the dare, I was nervous and ready at the same time. Cathy started at one end of the street. I started from the other. When she screamed, “GO!”, we both took off on our two-wheelers. We peddled as fast as our feet would go. Whoosh! Whoosh! The wheels on my Schwinn were spinning faster and faster and faster. I pedaled with such force, that I was no longer sitting on the seat. Instead, I was standing on the pedals. I stared straight ahead. I was afraid to take my eyes off Cathy for even a second. My hair whipped across my face.

 The DareSlide7

Closer. Closer. Closer we came to one another. I thought, "I won't be the one to 'chicken out' I just know Cathy will swerve away any second, and I will be the winner." At that moment that was all I cared about - winning. But Cathy didn’t swerve and neither did I. We crashed. Head on. Our bikes scraped together and crumpled. Our heads banged into one another and blood began to spurt. I guess in the end, neither of us could be called "chicken“. But I knew neither of us felt like winners. We hugged one another made a promise to never play that or any other game like it ever again.

The DareSlide8
Here’s what I noticed about the overall topic of this story:

The writer found this experience to be very dangerous.The writer is relieved that no one was hurt worse than they were.The writer is happy that the experience is over and never wants to do it again.The DareSlide9

Using My C

hoices to Improve My

C

onclusion or Ending

Revised Ending Using a Thought and Feeling:

As I drifted to sleep that night, my mind wandered. I reflected on what could have happened. I felt fortunate to be snuggled safely in my cozy bed.Slide10

Take NoteDid you notice how I added a thought? I reflected on what could have happened.

Did you notice how I added a feeling?

I felt fortunate to be snuggled safely in my cozy bed.

reflected

fortunateSlide11

Take NoteYou are going to do what I just did. Open to a clean page in your writer’s notebook.

Rewrite the conclusion or ending for this same piece of writing.

Try to use a different thought and feeling that also relates to the overall topic of the writing

. Slide12

On Your O

wn

After you finish writing your revised conclusion or ending, return to a completed piece of your writing. It can be an opinion essay, an explanatory essay, or a narrative story.

Reread it carefully paying close attention to the details that tell about the overall topic.Slide13

On Your

O

wn

Then write one or more conclusions or endings that reveal a thought and feeling about your topic.

Excited

Amazed

Happy

Sad

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