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Writing Errors Definition Essay

Your 1

st Draft/Self Edit

Follow the Checklist in the same way you would as a peer editor

Download the Editing checklist

Editing Checklist

Edit your paper

with the Editing Checklist

How to peer edit with checklist

In your 1

st

uncorrected draft, highlight the errors that you will correct in

red.

In your corrected draft, (the one to be graded for self-edit), fix all errors that you highlighted in red.

As well make sure the one to be graded is highlighted the following way:

Highlighting

thesis’

subject

,

opinion

,

three

points

.

Highlighting

body paragraphs’ topic sentences

’

subjects

,

opinions

, and

two points.

Underline your lead in sentences

highlighting the

point in teal

.

Highlight

each point teal

from your topic sentence in the lead in sentence (before CD)

Highlight

CD (For example)

purple

Highlight

CM (This means

) gray

Highlight CM

(Secondary

) gray

Turn in to blackboard in the following order: 1) Your corrected copy, 2) Your self-edited copy with red highlights, your editing checklist completed.

Your Teacher Edit

Follow the Peer Edit Checklist recommendations highlighting what needs to be corrected in red AND review the checklist once more for any other undetected errors.

Correct your errors in a new document—TE Do not highlight corrected errors in TE.

As well make sure the TE is highlighted the following way:

Highlighting

thesis’

subject

,

opinion

,

three

points

.

Highlighting

body paragraphs’ topic sentences

’

subjects

,

opinions

, and

two points.

Highlight

each point teal

from your topic sentence in the lead in sentence (before CD)

Highlight

CD (For example)

purple

Highlight

CM (This means

) gray

Highlight CM

(Secondary

) gray

Turn in to blackboard in the following order: 1) Your TE copy highlighted as directed above, 2) Your peer-edited copy with red highlights and the PE checklist.

CONTENT ERRORS

Missing lead in sentences after body paragraph topic sentences

Missing lead in sentences introducing the second point of your topic sentence.

Not focusing on the points in your topic sentence. Writing about an unrelated topic rather than the point you stated in your topic sentence.

Not having two points in your topic sentence

Not relating introductory quote to your prompt or thesis

Not relating your CM back to the thesis’s main opinion or topic

Lack of commentary to explain CD

CM: Only one sentence for a topic that needs much more

Slang words –kids, a lot,

CD being too general

Unnecessary CM that is unrelated to your topic

Not addressing the point in your CM from your CD

Weak concluding ending conclusion

Wording of your sentences—confusing

Not color-coded as per instructions

One sentence commentary Paragraph needs more than just the basic CM, CM

Combining concluding sentence as a commentary—therefore no concluding sentence

Too general CM

Conclusion blah

Example

Imagine yourself waking up in the middle of the night. The room is black like coal and silent. Suddenly, you hear footsteps and whispers. Your heart races, you begin to hyperventilate, and a bead of sweat runs down your forehead. Can you feel a tightness in your chest? Can you feel like there is something in your throat? Are you scared? Well, you have experienced fear. According to the Merriam-Webster Dictionary, fear is “an unpleasant, often strong, emotion caused by anticipation or awareness of danger” (“FEAR”). Being scared is natural and the thought of fear seems to be basically understood, but it is much more complex.

Fear

is an

agitated

feeling triggered by certain stimuli,

which might be

physica

l,

situational

, or

spiritua

l in nature.

Physical fear

is fear that

can be shown through phobias

such as

apiphobia

(fear of bees) and

coulrophobia

(fear of clowns).

One physical fear or phobia is a fear of bees or apiphobia

. For example, “A phobia is an unreasonable sort of fear that can cause avoidance and panic” (“Medical Definition of Apiphobia”). This means, fear will influence someone to run from their physical fear. Personally, from my personal experience as a

melissophobic

, I will dart away from bees and avoid them. Why? Not because of their fuzzy appearance and fast flying abilities, but due to their painful sting. Although, physical fears not only are stimulated by insects or animals, but by humans, such as clowns. According to researchers, “There are actual psychological reasons why we fear

Introductory Paragraph Example

“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited, where as imagination embraces the entire world, stimulating progress, giving birth to evolution.”

(“Imagination”

) This quote shows the importance of imagination and the different

things

that you are able to do with it when you know all of the types

(Unclear)

. The denotative meaning of imagination is “the faculty of imagining, or of forming mental images or concepts of what is not actually present to the senses.” (

Imagination Definition & Meaning |

Dictionary.com

)

This needs explanation.

Although imagination is an abstract word (

which is)

usually the ability of the mind to be creative or resourceful, it has different form such as(

: )

empath

(empathetic

resourcefullness

),

(inspirational)

dreams, and

emotion what are only the three out of the eight(unclear—need specificity)—strategic imagination

Missing Lead in Sentence

. THESIS: Fear is an

agitated

feeling triggered by certain stimuli, which might be physical, situational, or spiritual in nature.

Physical fears such as

melissophobia

or apiphobia (fear of bees) and coulrophobia (fear of clowns) help to define the complex meaning of fear.

(Too complex: One type of fear agitated by stimuli is a physical fear or phobia.)

For example, “A phobia is an unreasonable sort of fear that can cause avoidance and panic” (“Medical Definition of Apiphobia”). This means, fear will influence someone to run from their physical fear such as such

as

melissophobia

or apiphobia (fear of bees) and coulrophobia (fear of clowns).

Personally,

from my personal experience as a

melissophobic

, I will dart away from bees and avoid them. Why? Not because of their fuzzy appearance and fast flying abilities, but due to their painful sting.

Although, physical fears not only are stimulated by insects or animals, but by humans, such as clowns.

Another fear that is physical would be a fear of clowns. l

. According to researchers, “There are actual psychological reasons why we fear clowns” (“Why Are People Afraid of Clowns?”). This means, science backs up the true meaning to why clowns creep many people out. Also, real life killer clowns, like John Wayne

Gacy

, influence people to suffer from coulrophobia. It is also worth mentioning, pop culture has a big influence on the fear of clowns.

It

is a movie about a demonic clown that comes every 27 years to feast upon children and cause havoc. Movies like

It

, portray clowns to be scary and murderous. Despite the individuals who fear physical “dangers,” others quake at a specific situation that pose a threat.

Mechanical Errors

Previously discussed punctuation errors.

WC incorrectly formatted (Times Roman, 12

pt

, hanging indent, double spaced).

In-text citation incorrectly formatted (Last name of author, article in quotes, period at the end of the parenthesis)

Let’s Review How to Self & Peer Edit

Student share screen and reads paper aloud.

While student reads, editor stops to point out any confusion. Editor can make notes on own paper, as student reads.

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How to edit your peer’s paper with the Editing Checklist

How to peer edit with checklist

Complete editing checklist ALOUD, informing the author of his/her errors

Take turns, and repeat process

Return to the main room for Q & A.