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April mock
YEAR 10 ENGLISH LANGUAGE FEEDBACK
Are you ready to work hard and get better?Slide2
Gives more information about a noun.
e.g. blue, beautiful, historic, kindAn object, person, place or idea.
e.g. table, woman, Jane, Spain, peace. Concrete = the ones you can touch (pen)/ Abstract = the ones you can’t (love).An action or ‘doing’ word.e.g. go, jump, fly, look, see, (is/am/are/was/were) Dynamic = the ones you can see (jump)/ Stative = the ones you can’t (think)
Gives more information about a verb.e.g. carefully, slowly, quickly, spontaneously, high
Noun
– Adjective - Verb - Adverb –
WORD CLASSES…Slide3
Question one4 MARKSSlide4Slide5Slide6
QUESTION TWO8 MARKSSlide7Slide8
How is language used to describe
the rat?
Look at each part underlined in red CAREFULLY. What
techniques
have been used?Slide9
Imagery: sense of sight
Zoom-in: Two pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘wet’ + ‘greasy’
Imagery: sense of sight
Zoom-in: Use of dynamic verbs ‘pushing’ + ‘twisting
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Symbolism/ Metaphor/ Imagery
Zoom-in:Two
pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘mean’ + ‘red’
Simile
Zoom-in: verb phrase ‘weighed down’ or noun ‘overeating’Slide10
What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T:
One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is…E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes…A
: The use of (mention technique) implies that…This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys…Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because…
What should it not look like?
NOT BEGINNING WITH THE TECHNIQUE
NO TECHNIQUE?!
NO QUOTE?!
NO ZOOM-IN?!
MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES
MISLABELLED WORD CLASSES
NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS
SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON
#SNOOZEFESTSlide11
What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T:
One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is symbolism. E:
This may be observed in line 9 where the writer describes the rat as having “mean read eyes.”A: The use of symbolism implies that the rat is almost a demonic creature as “red” often has connotations with the devil or something of an evil nature. This also reveals that Alfred views the rat as an intimidating being, something which should be feared.
The use of the pre-modifying qualitative adjective “mean” also personifies the rat’s eyes which leads the reader to believe that the rat is a sly and cunning animal. The use of two adjectives side by side further reiterates the negative connotations of the rat’s physical appearance, hyperbolising the hideous impression that the rat evokes. Slide12
How is language used to describe
the rat?
Choose one of the ideas we have discussed and write the
PERFECT TEA paragraph
. I want to see the ‘big’ technique first and your ideas as to why it’s used; then zoom-in and explore connotations.Slide13Slide14Slide15
QUESTION THREE8 MARKSSlide16Slide17
DEVELOPMENT
(beginning, middle, end)
PARAGRAPH LENGTH
CHRONOLOGICAL
Linear
Non-linear
NARRATIVE PERSPECTIVE
First person
Second person
Third person
LIMITED NARRATOR
UNRELIABLE NARRATOR
OMNISCIENT NARRATOR
FLASHBACK
DIALOGUE
Structure techniques
TRIPARTITE LIST
JUXTAPOSITION
SYNDETIC/ ASYNDETIC LISTING
REPETITION
SENTENCE LENGTH
SENTENCE FUNCTION
SENTENCE TYPE
Minor sentence
Simple sentence
Compound sentence
Complex sentence
Compound complex sentence
Can you spot any of these techniques in the text?Slide18
Okay, we’ve spotted the techniques, but what can we say about them?
TECHNIQUE
EVIDENCE
ANALYSISSimple sentence“Alfred felt something move.”
Abrupt
opening
Limited informationCreates ambiguity Through the use of the noun “something” the reader is left feeling compelled to investigate the source of the movement.Dialogue/ Exclamative“Rat!”Asyndetic listing/ Ellipsis “Anger… hate… loss… pain”
Repetition/ Anaphora
“Almost used to/” “Used to”
Complex sentence
“He knew
it was wrong to be even remotely used to such sights, or to any of it, even for a second, let alone forever…Slide19
What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T:
One of the most prominent structural techniques used by the writer at the beginning of the text is… As the text develops, another prominent structural technique is…
Towards the end of the extract, the writer uses…E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes…A
: The use of (mention technique) implies that…
This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys…
Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because…
What should it not look like?
NOT WORKING THROUGH THE TEXT CHRONOLOGICALLY
NO TECHNIQUE?!
NO QUOTE?!
NO ZOOM-IN?!
MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES
NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS
SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON
#SNOOZEFESTSlide20Slide21Slide22
QUESTION FOUR20 MARKSSlide23Slide24
This should be a SWEATY paragraph…
I completely agree…I complete disagree…
ORTo some extent I agree…To some extent I disagree…Slide25
Flashback
Graphic
SimileDehumanisingImageverb
ConveysExhibitedReducesExtendedComparing
Disposed
Reinforced
ImplyCasuallyimmuneSlide26Slide27Slide28Slide29Slide30Slide31Slide32
4/20Slide33Slide34
6/20Slide35Slide36Slide37Slide38Slide39
13/20Slide40Slide41Slide42
16/20Slide43
QUESTION FIVE40 MARKS = 24+16Slide44Slide45Slide46Slide47Slide48
11/40
6+5Slide49Slide50Slide51Slide52
15/40
8+7Slide53Slide54Slide55Slide56Slide57
25/40
15+10Slide58Slide59Slide60Slide61Slide62Slide63Slide64Slide65
34/40
20+14Slide66
PAPER 2Slide67
QUESTION ONE4 MARKSSlide68Slide69
A,C,E,FSlide70
QUESTION TWO8 MARKSSlide71Slide72
Both
Range
TargetDifferentFocusesSlide73
However
Suggesting
ReinforcedImplyingSlide74Slide75Slide76Slide77
1/8Slide78Slide79
4/8Slide80Slide81Slide82
5/8Slide83Slide84Slide85
7/8Slide86Slide87Slide88
Effective vocabulary
Adverb
SimileViolent phrasevisualise
WitnessedInterventionHoveredIllusionConfirmsinexplicableSlide89Slide90Slide91Slide92Slide93
1/12Slide94Slide95Slide96
4/12Slide97Slide98
11/12Slide99Slide100Slide101
Perspectives
First hand accounts
InterviewscommentBoth
ConveyWitnessedDespiteScepticRationalcommentSlide102
Presents this case
Vocabulary
PersonifyingFirst hand accountFactualironically
SuggestsSupernaturalSuggestsAmusedMethodConvincingInvented
offeredSlide103Slide104Slide105Slide106Slide107
2/16Slide108Slide109
6/16Slide110Slide111Slide112Slide113Slide114
10/16Slide115Slide116Slide117Slide118Slide119Slide120
15/20Slide121Slide122Slide123Slide124
8/40
4+4Slide125Slide126Slide127Slide128
18/40
11+7Slide129Slide130Slide131Slide132Slide133Slide134Slide135
25/40
15+10Slide136Slide137Slide138Slide139Slide140Slide141Slide142
36/40
21+15