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occurs anytime a writer changes ifts you make are logical. An illogical shiftwriter changes tense, person, number, or voice for no good reason. illogical shift in tense occurs when a writer shifts from one tense to another for no Illogical Shift in Tense: The dog walked to the fireplace. Then, he circles twice and Revised: The dog walked to the fireplace. Then, he circled twice and lay Revised: The dog walks to the fireplace. Then, he circles twice and down in front of the fire. (consistent present) Edit the following sentences for illogical shifts received e force. Now, she is a chief of police. 1. When Beverly Harvard became the chief of the Atlanta police force, she is the first African-American ever to hold that title in a major U.S. city. _____ 2. She started on the police force when she was twenty-two, at a time when mostly white men work as Atlanta police officers. _____ 3. Now, more than half the department is African-American, and women made up 4. Harvard first thought about joining the force because her husband and a male friend said they do not believe women 5. Her husband even agrees to pay her $6. She accepted the challenge, and today she looks back on her first years of training with amazement at how little she knew then. _____ 7. In fact, when she entered the police academy, she did not really plan to be a police 8. One thing that helped her to advance was her administrative abiltalent for effective management. _____ 9. When her promotion was announced, some veteran officers criticize her appointment as police chief, but most10. Eventually, most members of the force cam illogical shift in personIllogical Shift: The hikers were told that you to Revised: The hikers were told that they Illogical Shift: Anyone can learn to cook if you practice. (3Revised: You can learn to cook if you Revised: Anyone can learn to cook if he or she practices. (consistent use of 3 person) Singular Plural I We you you he, she, it they Practice: person. Edit each sentence so that it uses third-person pronouns be sure to change the verb to ma Example: Before a person finds a have 1. Young people who want a career in the fahow hard you will have to work. 2. They think that working in the world of fashion will be glamorous and that you will quickly make a fortune. 3. In reality, no matter how talented you are, a recent college graduate entering the 4. The manufacturers and retailers who emfor three years or more at this salary before you are promoted. 5. A young designer may receive a big raise if you are very talented, but this is 6. New employees have to pay their dues, and you soon realize that most of your 7. Employees may be excited to land a job as an assistant designer 8. Other beginners in fashion houses discover that you spend most of your time 9. If a person is serious about working in10. For most newcomers to the industry, the ability to do what you are told to do is more important than your artis (one) or plural (more than one). illogical shift in numberother way around) for no apparent reasonIllogical Shift: Each visitor to the museum must check their cameras at the Revised: Each visitor to the museum must check his or her camera Revised: Visitors to the museum must check their cameras at the entrance. (consistent plural) Singular Plural I We he, she they Fred Fred and Ethel Man men an encyclopedia encyclopedias his, her their am, is, was are, were Practice: from singular to plural. You can either change the singular element to al element to the singular. Be sure to change the verb so it agrees with thence is correct, write Example: Each attorney first makes their opening speech. takes their time in making a decision.1. According to recent studies, a juror may have their mind made up before the trial 2. As attorneys offer their opening arguments, a juror may immediately decide 3. This unfounded conclusion often depends on which attorney makes their initial description of the case the most dramatic. _____ 4. During the trial, that juror will pay attention only to evidence that corresponds to the decision they have already made. _____ 5. A juror with poor decision-making skills is also not likely to listen to challenges mes together to deliberate. _____ 6. No matter how wrong they are, such a juthe highest damage payments. _____ 7. These jurors believe their re8. Such a juror will even make up their own evidence to support their case. _____ 9. For example, one juror argued that a man being tried for murder was acting in their own defense because the victim was probably carrying a knife, but no knife was mentioned during the trial. _____ 10. Studies suggest that a person who jumps to conclusions on a jury will not take their time when making other impor When the subject of a sentence performs active voiceWhen the subject of a sentence receives the action, the sentence is in the passive voiceActive Voice: Nat Turner organized a slave rebellion in August 1831. (Subject performs the action.) Passive Voice: A slave rebellion was organized (Subject rebellionillogical shift in voice occurs when a writer shifts from active to passive voice or from passive to active voice for no apparent reason. Illogical Shift in Voice: Cliff Prem wrote was also written by him. (active to passive) Revised: Cliff Prem wrote , and he also wrote Musicology was discovered by Ian Denson, and Grace active) Revised: Ian Denson discovered Musicology, and Grace Tacquard a new acting technique. (consistent active voice) Revise each sentence by Example: Several researchers are interesteddecision making was conducted by them recently. Revised: Several researchers are interested in leadership qualities, and they recently conducted a study of decision making . CORRECTING ILLOGICAL SHIFTS IN VOICEusually use the active voice in your writing. To change a sentence from the passive to the active voice, determine who or what nd make this noun the subject of a new active voice sentence. Passive voice: MySpace is used by some of my friends. Active Voice: Some of my friends use when the action being performed is more important than the person performing it. To change a sentence from the active to the p assive voice, determine who or what receives the action, and make this noun the Active Voice: Sarah Pirlogea completed her work on schedule. Passive Voice: The work was completed on schedule. 1. A local university funded the stud ________________________________________________________________. questions about decision making, _______ Instinct alone was relied After the researchers completed the study, a report was written _________________________________________________________________. ___________________, and most of them found the results surprising.