Gain control of our writing Verbals can often help you COMBINE sentences For instance YOU USUALLY SAY The siren shrieked and jolted Sam out of a sound sleep He rolled out of bed and stumbled into the bathroom He tried to remember what day it was ID: 225623
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When To Use Verbals
Gain control of our writing!Slide2
Verbals can often help you COMBINE sentences
For
instance
:
YOU USUALLY SAY
: The
siren shrieked and jolted Sam out of a sound sleep. He rolled out of bed and stumbled into the bathroom. He tried to remember what day it was.
(
3 SENTENCES - 3 SIMPLE SENTENCES!
)
THIS CAN BE SHORTENED!
The shrieking siren jolted Sam out of a sound sleep. Rolling out of bed and stumbling into the bathroom, he tried to remember what day it was.
(
2 SENTENCES – 1 SIMPLE AND 1 COMPOUND SENTENCE!
)
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Verbals can often help you COMBINE sentences
YOU TRY:
You'd probably SAY
: The athlete put on his cleats and ran down the field.
He rolled
his ankle in a hole and
staggered to the sideline. He attempted to ice his ankle. (
3 SENTENCES - 3 SIMPLE SENTENCES!
)
CAN THIS BE SHORTENED!
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(
2 SENTENCES – 1 SIMPLE AND 1 COMPOUND SENTENCE!
)
Slide4
Verbals can be used to change the emphasis in a paragraph
For
instance, in this paragraph, notice how the
WRITER
TRIES
to call attention to
the
noises
:
He
couldn't concentrate; the noises were just too distracting. Children
quarreled
shrilly in the street. Car horns
blared
as tires squealed. Dogs
barked
. A vacuum cleaner
hummed
. Someone
beat
on a set of drums, trying to pound them into submission
.
Less
emphasis on the noises is the result.
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Verbals can be used to change the emphasis in a paragraph
Now
notice how a little reworking using verbals changes the reader's focus:
His
concentration was broken by too many distractions--the shrill
quarrelling
of children in the street; the
blaring
of car horns as tires squealed, the
barking
of dogs, and the
beating
of drums by someone trying to pound them into submission.
MORE
emphasis
on the noises
by putting the “noise sound”
BEFORE
the noun!
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Verbals can be used to
change
the emphasis in a paragraph
YOU TRY (fix it):
DRAW ATTENTION TO THE NOISES
, not the subjects (nouns).
He was unable to sleep;
the noises
in the city were just
too
obnoxious. Taxi cabs drivers screamed out their windows.
Construction workers
drilled the pavement. Police officers blew their whistles. A nearby radio blared its tunes. An elevator’s door squeaked open.
TASK:
Rewrite by
putting
emphasis
on the
noises
!
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Control
the Emphasis! Task 2
Where’s the new emphasis?
YOU TRY:
DRAW ATTENTION TO
___?___
,
not
the subjects (nouns).
ORIGINAL
: The girl was lounging on the couch. She was putting her feet up on the ottoman. She grabbed the remote that was sitting on the side table.
REDO
: Lounging on the couch, the girl remained quiet. Putting her feet on the ottoman, she reached out an arm. Sitting on a nearby table, the remote found itself in the girl’s hands. Slide8
Control
the Emphasis! Task 2
Where’s the new emphasis?
YOU TRY:
DRAW ATTENTION TO
___?___
,
not
the subjects (nouns).
I’ll ask in a minute…
ORIGINAL
: The girl was lounging on the couch. She was putting her feet up on the ottoman. She grabbed the remote that was sitting on the side table.
REDO
: Lounging on the couch, the girl remained quiet. Putting her feet on the ottoman, she reached out an arm. Sitting on a nearby table, the remote found itself in the girl’s hands. Slide9
Control the Emphasis! Task 2
Sarah sat in the stands as her team took the field. Her jersey portrayed the enthusiasm she felt for the Red Sox. Today is going to be a big win for her baseball heroes.
TASK:
Rewrite by putting
emphasis
on
something other than the subject! (Why did you add the emphasis there?)
YOU TRY:
DRAW ATTENTION TO
something other than the subjects!
YOU TRY:Slide10
Control the Emphasis! Task 3
I am a hard working student. Twice a week I offer extra help to my classmates who need guidance. On Fridays I meet with Student Leadership to address the school’s needs and figure out how to make the school better.
YOU TRY:
DRAW ATTENTION TO
the most important qualities about
yourself
!
Writing a personal statement
(private schools and colleges REQUIRE this)
:
“Tell us about yourself and why you deserve to be accepted to our school or program.”
BORING!Slide11
Control the Emphasis! Task 3
I am a hard working student. Twice a week I offer extra help to my classmates who need guidance. On Fridays I meet with Student Leadership to address the school’s needs and figure out how to make the school better.
BORING!
Working hard, I am a student who is fully committed.
Offering
extra help twice a week to those who need guidance is one of the many ways I commit to the needs of others. Figuring out how to improve the school is my passion.Slide12
YOU TRY – TASK 3
DON’T DO THIS:
I am a hard working student. Twice a week I offer extra help to my classmates who need guidance. On Fridays I meet with Student Leadership to address the school’s needs and figure out how to make the school better.
DO SOMETHING GREAT!