Who Says? Holdstein Aquiline, Chapter 10 Revising, presenting 1 Revising Dont forget, the writing process is recursive Higher-order concerns compare to my Grading Form: Try to react like a readeraudience member Thesis Support Focus
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Who Says? Holdstein & Aquiline, Chapter 10
Revising, presenting 1<br>
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Revising Don’t forget, the writing process is recursive
Higher-order concerns [compare to my Grading Form]:
Try to react like a reader/audience member
Thesis
Support
Focus
Transitions
Paragraphs [units w/conclusion] and logical development
Use of sources, quotes
Your role [don’t overdo it]
Conclusion [that restates thesis in more detail]
Appropriate language, tone [third person] 2<br>
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Revising (cont.) Lower-order concerns [GSP, mainly; Q: What is “GSP”? Also use of APA citations]
Wait a bit for final edit; do it on paper [proofread]
Watch for sentences that you changed
Read the essay aloud
Read for specifics, e.g. just look at commas or just check in-text citations; don’t do it all at once
Peer review with a friend or classmate [similar list again on pp. 145-146]; note they me tion checking that all cites are in the Works Cited—you also need to check the reverse: if X is in the list mis X ever cited? 3<br>
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Thesis This is central. Is it
A position on a yes/no, debatable, non-trivial question
Supported by your evidence
Narrow and focused [and perhaps in more than one part/answer, e.g. X is a significant problem mainly for people Y, although there are solutions available and it is declining in impact]
Of use in answering the “So what?” question 4<br>
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Presentation Think of your audience (this class) and what they know about your topic
What tools will you use: Google Slides, PowerPoint, [Keynote (Apple)], Prezi, video, note cards, handouts; are you comfortable using them [e.g. going full screen, reversing]
Can you add something beyond what’s in your paper (often a video)
You’ll likely have research with data to present; decide what forms are appropriate:
Table (simple data)
Bar graph (for comparisons)
Pie chart (for parts of a whole)
Keep presentation simple [the 7/7/ rule: 7 words per line/bullet. 7 lines/bullets per slide. Don’t overdo images; give sources e.g. of videos; connect the dots between sources and your argument 5<br>
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Final thoughts Look at the Grading Form “handout”; also list on pp. 142-143.
Make sure all items in the Works Cited list are actually cited in the paper, and all in-text citations are in the Works Cited list [check off as you read through]; include page numbers
[Appendix: There is a sample APA research paper, with abstract. It is quite sophisticated in its tone—textbooks usually present the best work they see, but pretend it’s merely typical. There are a few errors: p. 173 cites (Huitt, 2002) but the paper by Huitt is 2011; on p. 174 add (1943) after Maslow’s; on p. 179 it’s 2013, not 2012; on p. 180 add (1999) after names of researchers in first sentence; page numbers in cites don’t match list; some References should have a publisher, most scholarly ones lack a DOI, some errors in italicizing, Rynes et al. entry is incomplete; but all in the list are cited, and all cited are in the list!] 6<br>
