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Academic english iii

November 22, 2013Slide2

Final Paper

Identify and research a problem of your choice (

the problem

may not involve Korea directly; i.e., North-South Korean relations is not acceptable

).

Research the problem thoroughly so you have a firm understanding of the situation, who it involves, and what its effects are

.

After extensive research of the problem, brainstorm several potential solutions for this problem (try to brainstorm at least 3 solutions).Slide3

Final Paper

For now, think of a problem that you are interested in and that you would like to research more about.Slide4

Today

Descriptive WritingSlide5

Consider this situation

You want to convince a foreign visitor that

Haeundae

beach is a great place to visit.

How does this sound?

“

Haeundae

is a fun place. It is beautiful and big. There are many people.”

Does

Haeundae

sound like a great place to visit?Slide6

Source:

busanhaps.com

Source:

www.flickr.com

Source:

members.virtualtourist.comSlide7

Descriptive Writing

Tells a story about a specific thing (object, person, place)

- Appeals to the senses: sights, sounds, smells, taste, feel

A good description is a “word picture”

- The reader can imagine the object/person/place in his or her mind.

“Shows” more than it tells.Slide8
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Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Subject

: clown doll

On my dresser is a toy clown on a

unicycle- a gift I got last Christmas

from a friend. The clown’s yarn hair

covers its ears. The blue eyes are outlined

in black with eye lashes coming from

the brows. It has red cheeks, nose, and

lips and its smile disappears into the

ruffle around its neck. The clown wears

a nylon costume. The left side of the

outfit is blue, and the right side is red.

The two colors join in a line down the centerof the outfit. Around the ankles, and covering its shoes are pink bows. The white

spokes on the wheels of the unicycle gatherin the center and go to the tire so the wheel looks like the inner half of a grapefruit. The modelis 24 centimeters tall. As a gift from my friend Tran,

I see this figure every time I enter my room.Slide10

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

This description is OK.

- It gives the reader an idea about the clown, but it is lacking in

descriptive style

.Slide11

Descriptive Style

Descriptive writing requires:

- Specific details

- Adjectives:

size, color, shape, texture, smell, purpose, personality, location, etc.

- Sensations and emotions.Slide12

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Subject

: clown doll

On my dresser is a toy clown on a

unicycle- a gift I got last Christmas

from a friend. The clown’s yarn hair

covers its ears. The blue eyes are outlined

in black with eye lashes coming from

the brows. It has red cheeks, nose, and

lips and its smile disappears into the

ruffle around its neck. The clown wears

a nylon costume. The left side of the

outfit is blue, and the right side is red.

The two colors join in a line down the centerof the outfit. Around its ankles, and covering its shoes are pink bows. The white

spokes on the wheels of the unicycle gatherin the center and go to the tire so the wheel looks like the inner half of a grapefruit. The modelis 24 centimeters tall. As a gift from my friend Tran,

I see this figure every time I enter my room.Slide13

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

On my dresser is a toy clown on a

unicycle-

a gift I got last

Christmas from

a friend.

Improved:

On

one corner of

my dresser

sits a smiling

toy clown on a tiny unicycle--a gift I received

last Christmas from a close friend.Slide14

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

The

clown’s yarn

hair covers

its ears. The blue eyes are

outlined in

black with eye lashes coming from

the brows.

Improved:

The clown's

short yellow hair, made of yarn, covers its ears but is parted above the eyes

. The blue eyes are outlined in black with thin, dark lashes flowing from the brows.Slide15

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

It has red cheeks, nose,

and lips

and its smile disappears into the

ruffle

around its neck.

Improved:

It has

cherry-red

cheeks, nose, and lips, and its

broad grin

disappears into the wide, white ruffle around its neck. Slide16

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

The clown

wears a

nylon costume. The left side of the

outfit

is blue, and the right side is red

.

The two colors join in a line down the

center of

the outfit.

Improved:

The clown wears a fluffy, two-tone nylon costume. The left side of the outfit is light blue, and the right side is red. The two colors

merge in a dark line that runs down the center of the small outfit.Slide17

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

Around

its

ankles, and

covering

its shoes are pink bows.

Improved:

Surrounding

its ankles and

disguising

its

long black shoes are big pink bows. Slide18

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

The

white spokes

on the wheels of the unicycle

gather in

the center and go to the tire so the wheel

looks

like the inner half of a grapefruit.

Improved:

The white spokes on the wheels of the unicycle gather in the center and

expand

to the black tire so that the wheel

somewhat resembles the inner half of a grapefruit. Slide19

Descriptive Paragraph: Example

Before:

The

model is

24 centimeters tall. As a gift from my friend

Tran, I

see this figure every time I enter my room.

Improved:

The

clown and unicycle together stand about

24 centimeters

high. As a

cherished gift from my good friend Tran,

this colorful figure greets me with a smile every time I enter my room.Slide20

Now, how about Haeundae?

Source:

busanhaps.comSlide21

Source:

busanhaps.comSlide22

Descriptive Writing

Tells a story about a specific thing (object, person, place)

- Appeals to the senses: sights, sounds, smells, taste, feel

A good description is a “word picture”

The reader can imagine the object/person/place in his or her mind.

“Shows” more than it tells.Slide23

Descriptive writing has a “direction”Slide24

Descriptive Style

Descriptive writing requires

:

- Specific details

- Adjectives:

size, color, shape, texture, smell, purpose, personality, location, etc.

- Descriptive “action verbs”

Try to avoid “be” verbs.

- Sensations and emotions.Slide25

Descriptive Style

Avoiding “be verb + adjective”

i.e.,

The food was unappetizing.

 The pale chicken slices floated limply in a pool of

murky fat.

The sprinkler was refreshing.

 The cool water from the sprinkler sprayed our hot

faces.Slide26

Descriptive Style

The tree is very tall.

Improved

:

- The

tree stretches toward the

sky.

- The

tree's branches reach far

upwards.

-

The tree brushes the clouds.

Source:

klick.wordpress.comSlide27

Descriptive Style

The blanket is colorful.

Improved

:

-

Rich colors decorate the blanket

.

- Deep

hues of red, green, and orange cover the blanket.

Source:

www.sarasews.net

 Slide28

Descriptive Style

Almond bong

bong

ice cream is delicious

.

Improved

:

-

The wonderful taste of almond bong

bong

lingers on the

tongue long after it is gone.

- Almond bong bong tastes of sweet cream, soft chocolate, and crunchy almonds.Source:

www.baskinrobbins.co.krSlide29

Descriptive Style

Snakes are scary.

Improved

:

- Snakes

strike fear into my heart.

- Snakes

, quiet and cunning, frighten Tony as though they were real-life monsters.

Source:

www.animaldanger.comSlide30

Descriptive Style

When she was young,

Jiho

was happy when

she

visited

Woobang

Land.

Improved

:

-

When she was young, visiting Woobang Land brought joy and excitement to Jiho

.Source: klick.wordpress.com