Day 1 Day 2 student and partner are peer revising Day 3 student is revising their own story Revising Read what you have written again Think about what others said about it Rearrange words or sentences ID: 315434
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Revising for ClarityDay 1
Day 2 student and partner are peer revising.
Day 3 student is revising their own story.Slide2
Revising Read what you have written again.Think
about what others said about it.
Rearrange
words or sentences.
Take
out or add parts.
Replace
overused or unclear words.
Read
your writing aloud to be sure it flows smoothly.Slide3
Let’s revise this paragraph…
Everyone has experienced the excruciating discomfort of an overfilled bladder. It encompasses your thoughts because the only action you want to is run to the bathroom. However, if bathrooms are inconveniently closed, this
simlpe
desire cannot be met and the act of a bodily cannot be completed. Such is the case in Montgomery Blair High School in Maryland, where bathrooms have recently been closed on closed on the second and third floor during lunch periods. This act of injustice should not be allowed because a
childs
blater
is a very fragile thing and the of not allowing it to perform in its daily manner should be acknowledged. Slide4
After Revising…Everyone has experienced the excruciating discomfort of an overfilled bladder. It encompasses your thoughts because the only action you want to complete is the run to the bathroom. However, if bathrooms are inconveniently closed, this simple desire cannot be met and the act of a bodily function cannot be completed. Such is the case in Montgomery Blair High School in Maryland, where bathrooms have recently been closed on the second and third floor during lunch periods. This act of injustice should not be allowed because a child’s bladder is a very fragile thing and the severity of not allowing it to perform in its daily manner should be acknowledged. Slide5
Your TurnLook through your rough draft and start your revisions.
Make sure you:
Reread
Take out unnecessary words
Add sentences or phrases
Read aloud to make sure writing
makes sense