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On Tuesday I asked you to write about a PERSON who has had an influence on your development as a readerwriter Now I want you to choose ONE instance or event that you think tells your reader about your development as a writer ID: 383926

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Using Description to Add Detail

On Tuesday, I asked you to write about a PERSON who has

had an influence on your development as a reader/writer

Now, I

want you to choose ONE

instance or event

that you think tells your reader about your development as a writer.

This doesn't have to be the one that you end up writing about, and when you do choose your event, you can do this exercise on your own. Slide2

Detail/Description Practice:

Write your event at the top of a new sheet of paper.

For example: "The time I read a book on my own," or whatever it was that you chose.

Write about things you remember SEEING. What did the room/house/setting look like? Were there any objects that stick out in your mind? An old table? A shiny new book's cover? What did the people look like? If there were no other people but you present, describe yourself at that age. Let your reader see you as you saw yourself.

Write about things you remember HEARING. If you are writing about language, what did the words sound like? What did they make you think of? What were other sounds that formed language associations? Kids yelling down the street, hum of computers, sounds of other languages being spoken, music… Slide3

Description Practice, Cont.

Now, write about things you remember

TOUCHING/FEELING.

This is an often neglected sense, but we get so much information from it. What did those new shoes make your feet

feel

like? What did the pages of the new book feel like?

Write about things that you remember

smelling/tasting.

Smell is our sense that is most closely connected to memory. Use that to your advantage. Slide4

Writing Reflectively

When we

reflect,

we don't simply tell

what happened.

We also think about…

Why

it happened

What patterns/attitudes influenced events

How we

felt

about what happened

How what happened continued to affect us

How what happened fits into the "big picture" of human experience

And, of course, what we learned/realized

When you write a narrative, you write a story about what happened and also

reflect

what it means—the point you are trying to make.

Narrative writing is writing with DESCRIPTION and REFLECTION.Slide5

Description and Reflection

Reflection

is where the author takes a step back from the

events they are

describing

to

think about their

significance

.

what

they

meant

for his or her

life

how

they might

connect

to other experiences or

subjects

how

they

relate

to the outside world.

The “Camera Lens” metaphor

Zoom In – to describe detail and narrate events

Zoom Out – to reflect and think about what these events have meant to you. Slide6

Tips for writing reflectively:

Be honest. Don't worry about "revealing too much."

This class is a safe place to reflect and express yourself.

Push yourself out of your comfort zone.

Good writing tends to make lots of people (including the author) uncomfortable. Work through your discomfort and see what you end up with. Slide7

Writing Reflectively in Your Literacy Narrative

Think about the event you wrote about earlier in class.

Take a moment and REFLECT on the event you have just described.

Write about

w

hy

this event

happened

. You might want to consider…

social conditions

cultural issues

choices you/other people made

other patterns of events

This could be as simple as “

I read this book because my family was fortunate enough to be able to afford a babysitter, and she took me to the library” or “because my family didn’t have a lot of money, Grandma took care of me and would read to me from old children’s books.” Slide8

Writing Reflectively in Your Literacy Narrative

Now, w

rite

for five minutes about how you

feel

about these

events. Write about how you felt

then.

Write about how you feel

now.

'm

not going to collect these, so don't censor yourself.

Please

take this seriously, though. You may find out that you have something you can

use for your essay later, after you edit

.

Write through your discomfort.Slide9

Making an Outline

For many people, outlining is a very useful process. It forces you to plan your essay ahead of time and think about how the parts relate to each other.

Make sure you include the

significance of your event

in your thesis.

For

example: “Reading that book changed how I saw myself” or “Being placed in that class destroyed my confidence”

Use transition words to connect your events together.

Phrases

like “Three years later,” “two weeks after this happened,” etc

.

Your essay may have more than three events or details. You can easily expand this outline later.Slide10

NEXT WEEK:

Tuesday, February 25

Topics:

Peer Review Workshop for Essay 1

Homework

Due:

Rough

Draft of Literacy Narrative (typed and printed, 3 copies)

Your Rough Draft should be at least 1 or 2 pages long, double spaced.

Thursday, February 27

Topics: The Revision Process, Peer Review Reflection

Homework Due:

R

ead

Chapter 29 “How to Write Good Sentences” p. 551—569.

Bring

the most recent draft of your Literacy Narrative to class.Slide11

Expectations for Peer Review on Tuesday Next Week

Come to class with

three copies

of your draft already printed out. It is not appropriate to use your group’s time to print out your draft. It is

your responsibility

to be ready for peer review when class begins.

Come

to class with

more than an outline

.

It doesn’t have to meet the required page length yet,

but it needs to have full paragraphs, description and reflection, and

your peers need to be able to give you advice besides “you need to finish your essay.”

Come

to class with questions for your peer group about how to improve your essay.