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LIFE/work balance
We have started a #LIFEworkbalance campaign and we need your help to complete our LIFE/work balance survey.
We hope to publish the results soon, so please give 15 minutes of your time to help us get a true picture of school life.
Want to be a part of this campaign? Take the survey on our website and share it with your colleagues!<br>
We have started a #LIFEworkbalance campaign and we need your help to complete our LIFE/work balance survey.
We hope to publish the results soon, so please give 15 minutes of your time to help us get a true picture of school life.
Want to be a part of this campaign? Take the survey on our website and share it with your colleagues!<br>
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Year 6 – Summer Block 1 – Cohesion – Using Devices to Build Cohesion
About This Resource:
This PowerPoint has been designed to support your teaching of this small step. It includes a starter activity and an example of each question from the Varied Fluency and Application and Reasoning resources also provided in this pack. You can choose to work through all examples provided or a selection of them depending on the needs of your class.
National Curriculum Objectives:
English Year 6: Linking ideas across paragraphs using a wider range of cohesive devices: repetition of a word or phrase, grammatical connections [for example, the use of adverbials such as on the other hand, in contrast, or as a consequence], and ellipsis
Terminology for pupils:
Ellipsis
More resources from our Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling scheme of work.
Did you like this resource? Don’t forget to review it on our website.<br>
About This Resource:
This PowerPoint has been designed to support your teaching of this small step. It includes a starter activity and an example of each question from the Varied Fluency and Application and Reasoning resources also provided in this pack. You can choose to work through all examples provided or a selection of them depending on the needs of your class.
National Curriculum Objectives:
English Year 6: Linking ideas across paragraphs using a wider range of cohesive devices: repetition of a word or phrase, grammatical connections [for example, the use of adverbials such as on the other hand, in contrast, or as a consequence], and ellipsis
Terminology for pupils:
Ellipsis
More resources from our Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling scheme of work.
Did you like this resource? Don’t forget to review it on our website.<br>
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Year 6 – Summer Block 1 – Cohesion – Using Devices to Build Cohesion
Notes and Guidance:
This step consolidates previous steps within this block and from Year 5 Summer Block 2.
Children should recognise and use all devices to build cohesion in and across paragraphs, linking ideas effectively and avoiding repetition.
This step includes cohesive devices within fiction and non-fiction writing.
Focused Questions
Underline and label the devices used to build cohesion in this piece of writing.
Improve this piece of work by adding in cohesive devices.<br>
Notes and Guidance:
This step consolidates previous steps within this block and from Year 5 Summer Block 2.
Children should recognise and use all devices to build cohesion in and across paragraphs, linking ideas effectively and avoiding repetition.
This step includes cohesive devices within fiction and non-fiction writing.
Focused Questions
Underline and label the devices used to build cohesion in this piece of writing.
Improve this piece of work by adding in cohesive devices.<br>
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Year 6 – Summer Block 1 – Cohesion
Step 7: Using Devices to Build Cohesion<br>
Step 7: Using Devices to Build Cohesion<br>
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Introduction
Put the following sentences in order to form a cohesive paragraph. The first sentence is in the correct place.<br>
Put the following sentences in order to form a cohesive paragraph. The first sentence is in the correct place.<br>
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Introduction
Put the following sentences in order to form a cohesive paragraph. The first sentence is in the correct place. Sherry, who seemed to forever be three paces behind him, was struggling to keep up. She climbed over the crates as Alvin disappeared through the hole. As the thief darted through a hole in the fence, Alvin leapt over the scattered crates. On the other side of the fence, Alvin scrambled to his feet. The thief hid when he saw Alvin stand up and look around.<br>
Put the following sentences in order to form a cohesive paragraph. The first sentence is in the correct place. Sherry, who seemed to forever be three paces behind him, was struggling to keep up. She climbed over the crates as Alvin disappeared through the hole. As the thief darted through a hole in the fence, Alvin leapt over the scattered crates. On the other side of the fence, Alvin scrambled to his feet. The thief hid when he saw Alvin stand up and look around.<br>
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Varied Fluency 1
Match each extract from the text to the type of cohesive device it features. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Match each extract from the text to the type of cohesive device it features. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 1
Match each extract from the text to the type of cohesive device it features. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Match each extract from the text to the type of cohesive device it features. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 2
Tick the reason ‘Only a few moments earlier…’ needed to start a new paragraph. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Tick the reason ‘Only a few moments earlier…’ needed to start a new paragraph. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 2
Tick the reason ‘Only a few moments earlier…’ needed to start a new paragraph. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Tick the reason ‘Only a few moments earlier…’ needed to start a new paragraph. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 3
Complete the table with examples from the text. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Complete the table with examples from the text. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 3
Complete the table with examples from the text. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Complete the table with examples from the text. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 4
Write out one adverbial from the text and state whether it tells you where or when something happened. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Write out one adverbial from the text and state whether it tells you where or when something happened. Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Varied Fluency 4
Write out one adverbial from the text and state whether it tells you where or when something happened.
Various answers, for example:
Only a few moments earlier – when Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
Write out one adverbial from the text and state whether it tells you where or when something happened.
Various answers, for example:
Only a few moments earlier – when Mike felt a shriek of fear tearing up through his chest as he careered towards the ramp which loomed in front of him. His arms juddered violently as the ground (now just a khaki blur) pummelled his bike tyres and sent shockwaves through his body. As the ramp raced towards him, he began to wonder if this jump was a smart idea...
Only a few moments earlier, he had been the very picture of bravado. Everyone had been egging him on, eager to encourage any individual who might provide them with the next viral fail video. With a confident shout, he had grabbed the bike and aimed himself down the hill.
Lori, who had given up trying to talk her brother out of stunts like this, covered her eyes. She heard his shriek. She heard the sound of tyres flying up a ramp. She heard the crowd gasp… and then she heard the cheers!<br>
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Application 1
Write the first two sentences of the next paragraph of the story. You must include a parenthesis. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Write the first two sentences of the next paragraph of the story. You must include a parenthesis. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
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Application 1
Write the first two sentences of the next paragraph of the story. You must include a parenthesis.
Various answers, for example:
Back at the shop, the line was still enormous. People in the queue (some of whom had been waiting since 6 a.m.) were indignant when they saw Xavier try to push in. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Write the first two sentences of the next paragraph of the story. You must include a parenthesis.
Various answers, for example:
Back at the shop, the line was still enormous. People in the queue (some of whom had been waiting since 6 a.m.) were indignant when they saw Xavier try to push in. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
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Reasoning 1
Explain how the adverbial ‘several months earlier’ aids cohesion in the text. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Explain how the adverbial ‘several months earlier’ aids cohesion in the text. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
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Reasoning 1
Explain how the adverbial ‘several months earlier’ aids cohesion in the text.
The adverbial shows readers that the new action of paragraph two takes place at a different time to the action of paragraph one. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Explain how the adverbial ‘several months earlier’ aids cohesion in the text.
The adverbial shows readers that the new action of paragraph two takes place at a different time to the action of paragraph one. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
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Application 2
Write a sentence which could be added to paragraph three. Your sentence must include a relative clause which refers back to information given earlier in the story. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Write a sentence which could be added to paragraph three. Your sentence must include a relative clause which refers back to information given earlier in the story. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
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Application 2
Write a sentence which could be added to paragraph three. Your sentence must include a relative clause which refers back to information given earlier in the story.
Various answers, for example: His eyes shone as he grasped the prize which he had waited so long to own. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>
Write a sentence which could be added to paragraph three. Your sentence must include a relative clause which refers back to information given earlier in the story.
Various answers, for example: His eyes shone as he grasped the prize which he had waited so long to own. Xavier finished dismantling his tent, sat down on his rucksack and checked the time. 8:55 a.m. Behind him, the line stretched for at least three hundred metres. It had almost doubled in length in the time it had taken him to pack everything away.
Xavier had concocted his camping plan several months earlier. The minute a sequel had been announced for Kingdoms Forged (the game Xavier had been glued to for most of the previous year), he had wanted to be one of the first people to play it. He knew that queues on the release date would be huge, so he had planned an overnight stay at the front of the line.
It had worked. Half an hour after packing his tent away, Xavier was back at home and tearing the wrapping off a brand new copy of the game. He turned on his console, popped open the game box… and wailed. His disc! It was cracked!<br>